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You can read
the word I love you
at the bottom of the letters
that appeared in your desk back then
You can hear
the word I love you
whispered by me in your ear
under the moon as we sat together
You can feel
the word I love you
when our bond was sealed
under the majestic bells
But now,
you may not hear it again
for that's what I do
Every day, every hour
every breath that I take
I am loving you
forever and always...
the word I love you
at the bottom of the letters
that appeared in your desk back then
You can hear
the word I love you
whispered by me in your ear
under the moon as we sat together
You can feel
the word I love you
when our bond was sealed
under the majestic bells
But now,
you may not hear it again
for that's what I do
Every day, every hour
every breath that I take
I am loving you
forever and always...
Literature
A Day Without
The sun
wrapped teasing fingers around my body
and shook me awake this morning.
Though I usually sleep in,
early morning is my favorite time of day.
When the sun is just peeking its timid head above the horizon,
eyes playing peek-a-boo with the edge of the Earth,
and its rays tickling the edges of dew drops.
It gives the whole world a soft glow,
that seems to warm your heart,
as much as the damp grass.
Trying to get out of bed quietly,
I let my bare feet hit the cool hardwood,
smooth beneath my feet,
as if welcoming me, and pulling me into the day.
An odd feeling is growing in my stomach,
and I rustle the bed a little too muc
Literature
Your Promiscuous Ways
When you suddenly took my hand and told me that you love me,
I've never been more touched by the need in your voice and the love in your eyes.
And when you look at me in that promiscuous way,
I can think of nothing else but being gazed upon by you every day.
You don't do this often most of the days,
But when you do,
My heart burns of an unmistakable need in return,
And I can feel this love in your ever simple words.
It's the kind of love I've always wanted,
The kind of voice that makes everything just fine.
It's one of the most beautiful feelings I've ever had,
And something I don't ever want to forget.
Literature
I still love you
Though you may have broken my heart,
I still love you.
Though you may have hurt me,
I still love you.
Though I'm angry with you,
I still love you.
With all of my heart.
To me, you're perfect in every way.
Your angelic voice
Your caring nature
Your gorgeous blue eyes
Your sensitivity
Your funny disposition
Your helpfulness
Your scent
Your touch
The way you loved and cared for me
You're amazing.
And yes I am suffering without you,
But it was worth it just to be with you.
You silly foolish boy,
I still love you.
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The factor that I remove is time.
Let me know what do you think
And as usual, critics are most welcome 
This is the photo version (Forever and Always)
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"One Factor" Literary ContestThe factor that I remove is time.
Let me know what do you think
And as usual, critics are most welcome This is the photo version (Forever and Always)
:thumb179231940:
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactThank you for entering the One Factor Contest as #Writers--club! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt="
" title="La la la la"/>This poem really is a beautiful one. The repetition of the italicized "I love you" is very sweet, and it adds to the overall feeling of tenderness that is reflected in each line.
The overall idea is a familiar one, but you did a fine job of presenting it in your own way. The vision was just clear enough to leave the exact aspects of the situation to be decided by the reader, your overall technique as fine, and the closing impact was well handled. Good work!
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